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Kopar333
The Mystery

One day billy and bob where in Rowley walking around and they heard a loud bang so they ran over to where the sound was coming from it was coming from the barn billy did not want to go inside but bob did so he draged billy in. billy started screaming bob told him to shut up it was
just a creaky plank of ply wood then all of a sudden the whole thing started to rumble so billy was dragging bob when
they got out it stopped billy thought there where ghosts then 1.bob smacked some sence into billy then bob said ya I don't know what I was talking about. That night it was pizza night so bob and billy stayed they had pizza,pop and popcorn. That is when things started to go missing. That was the begging to the mystery and that is when billy and bob found the first clue
a car went missing it was a bright red 3.Ferrari the owner was very SAD than they found a replica of it parked in the 3.elevator then they where very 2.frustrated cause they did not find it so they went to every town and asked some of the people in the towns if they have seen the car but nobody has and then billy 4.said that they better call it a day and go home. The next day they got up and had pancakes,eggs,bacon,toast and orange juice and then they were up and back in Rowley looking for clues and to ask the owners some questions the fist one was if there was somebody that wanted it they did not think so so billy and bob went down to Drumheller to look around so they
went to look in some sheds but there was nothing so they went to have some lunch and that is when billy thought of the clue that they needed to solve the mystery.

Then all of a sudden billy left bob in the dust bob said wait up billy sorry I
can't I am on to something I am going back to Rowley. When I got to Rowley I hid in the elevator and that is when I caught
the thief he was steeling a grain truck so billy ran over to the truck and ripped the guy out of it and told him to stay where he was cause he was going to jail and that meant they would have to carry him out cause he was knocked out 7.billy said he
was he size of both of them put to gether. And that is when the police showed up and they returned the car and also got reward. 6.That is when they got back doing the things kids do.








The Graffiti Ghoul
by The Man



Hi, my name is Ah-Po and this is my story. One day as I was playing in my backyard I heard an earth shattering cry from Mrs. Rosette! I hurried over to her house as fast as I could. When I got there I asked what was wrong. She replied in a sob, “Somebody spray painted the new siding on my garage! Oh please Ah-Po, can you help me with this crisis?”
With I sigh I replied, “Yes,” and went off to find the culprit. I knew a girl named Kenosha who was very artistic, and judging by the spray paint job it looked like somebody would have to have a lot of talent to do something like that. I went over to her house and knocked on the door. No one answered, I knocked again still no answer. I looked in the window and it appeared that she was gone. “ Not her,” I mumbled. Next there was John , he has been known to do garfftti and vandalize other peoples property. I went to his house and right away I knew no one was there. As I was walking down the road his mom pulled up beside me in her SUV. “Hi Ah-Po, are you looking for John?”
“I am, do you know where he is?”
Yes, he is at Omar's house.”
“OK thanks,” and headed on my way. When I got there I saw Omar and John in the drive way playing road hockey. I asked, “have you guys been over by my place today?”
“No!” they both replied very quickly, “and we did not spray paint Mrs. Rosette's garage!” Then I knew something was fishy. Out of the corner of my eye I saw a red can of spray paint, just like the color of the spray on the garage.



Can you solve the mystery?


If they said they were not by my place, how would they know that her garage was spray painted. It was something only the person and/or people that did the crime would know. And just to top it off, the can that was used to spray paint with, was sitting right in the driveway. It was very obvious that Omar and John did it.

This is my story

A HURTING CASE
By: Decklan


“ Hey Meka hows it going?” I asked.
“ Good, but theres been a lot of kids with bruises lately.”
“ Yea I wonder who did that?” I answered. Later that day heard Ian crying on the play ground.
“ Whats wrong?” I asked him.
“ I just got attacked by two dark figures,” he answered.
“ Do you know who they were?” I asked.
“ No they came so quickly, but one was chubby and the other was fairly skinny,” he answers.
“ OK. Lets get you inside,” I said. That night I thought about who could be hurting kids like this. Tomorrow I would go around to every mean looking kid in the school and ask them if they were hurting kids. I hoped it would work and I would NOT get hurt. After two hours of asking kids and getting punched in the face I think I finally found the two who were doing it: Craig and Todd.
“ Craig, Todd do you know about kids getting hurt lately?” I asked.
“ We didn't hurt Ian! ” Craig answered.
“ So you guys are hurting kids,” I asked.
“ No, we were told that Ian had got a broken leg from our friends,” they told me.
“ We'll see about that,” I whispered to myself. That same day I asked all Todd's, and Craig's friends and their answer was, “ we didn't tell them that.” So I think I know who did it, do you.


Try to solve the mystery!

When Todd and Craig said “we didn't hurt Ian, ” and I said “so you guys are hurting kids,” and they said, “ we were told Ian had a broken leg by a friend,” I knew they were lying. When I asked their friends if they had told Todd, and Craig that Ian had a broken leg they all said no. So it's pretty obvious that they were doing it.


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